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289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

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289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by CT44 on Thu May 07, 2009 5:44 pm

This is my very first comic in the series. I present to you, "Special Operations".
































There will be more coming soon...

Hope you liked it!

C&C Appreciated! Smile

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by MuffinHobo on Thu May 07, 2009 5:49 pm

Not bad, not bad. Overall it was pretty darn good. Nice job with the gimping too. Just make the text bigger next time, it was a tad hard to read.

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by CT44 on Thu May 07, 2009 5:50 pm

I realized that too...After I posted it. Razz

Oh well, I'll fix it next time.

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by Luke on Thu May 07, 2009 5:52 pm

You could make the words a bit bigger or change the font and the AA guns need to be bigger.

If you fix it up, then this comic could be quite good.

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by Alpha on Thu May 07, 2009 5:52 pm

First shot was directly out of FEMA's.


Why red bricks everywhere?

And why, is there just 1 AA gun in the middle of nowhere with Droids surrounding it?

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by foxrex101 on Thu May 07, 2009 5:55 pm

Dude, the eighth picture was an EPIC WIN in my opinion and also try to make the text bigger and add more of a plot to the story.

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by Superperson on Thu May 07, 2009 6:07 pm

I like the story alot. Nice figures. Hola Wow!

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by CT44 on Thu May 07, 2009 6:18 pm

Alpha wrote:First shot was directly out of FEMA's.


Why red bricks everywhere?

And why, is there just 1 AA gun in the middle of nowhere with Droids surrounding it?



1. I know mine looks similar, but it was just coincidence...

2. The red bricks are the walkway...

3. Because they need something to keep the Republic from Invading and they needed to build it in a short amount of time. The Pilot Droids are there because they are controling it and the Security Droids are guarding the Surrounding Area...

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by Alpha on Thu May 07, 2009 6:24 pm

Though if it's a CIS outpost, there should be Droids swarming the area...

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by CT44 on Thu May 07, 2009 6:29 pm

Ok, so the story behind this is that the CIS have just sent a platoon of droids to secure the city before they send in the whole fleet. The Republic take advantage of this oppurtunity and invade them before the fleet od Droids arrive...

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by pdragon27 on Thu May 07, 2009 6:31 pm

foxrex101 wrote:Dude, the eighth picture was an EPIC WIN in my opinion and also try to make the text bigger and add more of a plot to the story.


Its an EPIC FAIL in my book.


This comic isn't bad. Try to put some more action into it and make the characters less robotic...

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by CT44 on Thu May 07, 2009 6:35 pm

What do you mean by 'Robotic'?

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by pdragon27 on Thu May 07, 2009 6:44 pm

As in, give them a personality. Not just the standard "OMG. UBER-HARD MISSION. Send in the Special guys. Uh-oh. Droids. Shoot them. Yay! We win."

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by RubbahBand on Thu May 07, 2009 6:45 pm

Good comic although, to me it seems a bit choppy and quick.

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by fireworkgamer on Thu May 07, 2009 6:55 pm

The AA gun could have been better and bigger.

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by Gerrard on Thu May 07, 2009 7:18 pm

Good comic but a bit short. The effect were good and it had good pictures. Just make the text bigger and maybe a different font. Otherwise, it is very well done! Smile

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by foxrex101 on Thu May 07, 2009 8:05 pm

Pdragon wrote:
foxrex101 wrote:Dude, the eighth picture was an EPIC WIN in my opinion and also try to make the text bigger and add more of a plot to the story.


Its an EPIC FAIL in my book.


This comic isn't bad. Try to put some more action into it and make the characters less robotic...


How is that a EPIC FAIL? I have seen no one on this sight that has taken a photo behind the clones going to attack the droids. :scratch:

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by CT44 on Thu May 07, 2009 8:11 pm

I agree, that was my favorite shot in the whole comic...

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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by Gerrard on Thu May 07, 2009 8:38 pm

Ummm, you mean like this?


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Re: 289th Legion #1: "Special Operations"

Post by CT44 on Thu May 07, 2009 8:39 pm

No...One where they are running and the Droids are blurred in the Background...

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