Stranded

Help me get better at the moc.

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There is no speaking because it will be changed. There is a droid that is sort of flaoting in air because of the force.

I love myz Fordo! Ok, moc, needs more greebles!

Wow I love it, look at that baseplate! (whistles)

Commander Mongoose wrote:Ok, moc, needs more greebles!

No, it doesn't What it needs is a actual MOC. To call this a MOC is to call bread crusts a gormet meal. It's just a baseplate, with some mini-figures and some bricks slopped on it.

• I don't care how little Lego you have, anyone could have done better with what is displayed in this -- model. Just popping down a few pieces here and there doesn't do it. Try to sculpt slopes, dig out trenches, make cliffs; just anything but that sorry collection of bricks.
  
• THOSE ARE NOT JEDI. By the Force, why is one wearing a fireman's hat! Where are their robes or armor... anything?
  
• The postioning of the units is piss-poor. A ARC just magically appears on the edge of the baseplate -- nice. Not a single droid turns to face him -- nice.
  
• Don't customize unless you know how. Get rid of that droid that looks like I bled on it. Furthermore, uniformity is key with units. Make the Seperatist lines organized, and try to get some similiarity between those clones. For goodness sake, you've got a unmarked ARC, a red ARC, and another who also looks like I smeared my bodily fluids on it. Keep them all red, all white, or don't put any down at all....

I can be your most bitter critiquer, or I can laud you from here to Ansion. You're far from the latter . Advise you shape up, because this is unacceptable as of current .

Sialboats wrote:

Commander Mongoose wrote:Ok, moc, needs more greebles!

No, it doesn't What it needs is a actual MOC. To call this a MOC is to call bread crusts a gormet meal. It's just a baseplate, with some mini-figures and some bricks slopped on it.

• I don't care how little Lego you have, anyone could have done better with what is displayed in this -- model. Just popping down a few pieces here and there doesn't do it. Try to sculpt slopes, dig out trenches, make cliffs; just anything but that sorry collection of bricks.
  
• THOSE ARE NOT JEDI. By the Force, why is one wearing a fireman's hat! Where are their robes or armor... anything?
  
• The postioning of the units is piss-poor. A ARC just magically appears on the edge of the baseplate -- nice. Not a single droid turns to face him -- nice.
  
• Don't customize unless you know how. Get rid of that droid that looks like I bled on it. Furthermore, uniformity is key with units. Make the Seperatist lines organized, and try to get some similiarity between those clones. For goodness sake, you've got a unmarked ARC, a red ARC, and another who also looks like I smeared my bodily fluids on it. Keep them all red, all white, or don't put any down at all....

I can be your most bitter critiquer, or I can laud you from here to Ansion. You're far from the latter . Advise you shape up, because this is unacceptable as of current .

Come on dude, lighten up. For all we know he could be a five year old!

I agree with Sialboats, but I don't think you have to be so harsh.... there's a better way to tell him that his MOC needs work.
And Mongoose, I am pretty sure he's 9 years old....

And Crusher, I think that your red ARC turned out pretty good!

Commander Mongoose wrote:

Come on dude, lighten up. For all we know he could be a five year old!

Well then he needs to become exceptional, and get on par with the rest of CABG.

That, and I've never really thought that children should be treated like children. I don't care if he's a 3 year old or a 40 year old adult. I'm either very harsh, or very approving .

Thunder-blade wrote:I agree with Sialboats, but I don't think you have to be so harsh.... there's a better way to tell him that his MOC needs work.
And Mongoose, I am pretty sure he's 9 years old....

And Crusher, I think that your red ARC turned out pretty good!

That mine, I traded, cough cough!

This isn't quite an MOC. That is the kind of model that I find when I shove my baseplate into my bulk bricks assorted tub, close my eyes, compress some pieces, and pull out the baseplate.

This is supposed to be a Star Wars battle, isn't it? Not Lego Island's coolest kid versus the Brickster fire squad! I'm not going to try to help you until you try to help yourself.

And don't say 'I'm nine that's my excuse'. This is a mature site, if you don't feel like you are mature enough to take criticism of a bad MOC than well you're not old enough anyways.

Why are you even on the internet if you're only nine. You'd be amazed how dangerous the interwebz can be. Some of us FBTBers, we kill and eat people that break the rules...

Seriously, I don't know where to begin to criticise your baseplate, so I'm not going to. You're nine, you can do better than this. Heck, I could have done what you've done aged 5! Mean or not, that's the truth of the matter.

I'm not going to say what I was going to say (Sial voiced my opionion.), but seriously, COME ON! Also has anyone noticed he keeps posting new topics when he is not a guild member?

... you're allowed to post in the WIP Thread. Just no where else. And I'm sorry, but does this even LOOK like a MOC? Its just a freaking baseplate, with freaking bricks an whatnot on! And why do you have that freaking lego fig as your Jedi?!

STOP FLAMING. You can make your point seem nice. Try to tell him 2 cons for every pro. Also, the word is CONSTRUCTIVE ctrisism. Not just "Wow this sucks, make it better, good luck." Tell him HOW to make it better!

Commander Mongoose wrote:

Sialboats wrote:

Commander Mongoose wrote:Ok, moc, needs more greebles!

No, it doesn't What it needs is a actual MOC. To call this a MOC is to call bread crusts a gormet meal. It's just a baseplate, with some mini-figures and some bricks slopped on it.

• I don't care how little Lego you have, anyone could have done better with what is displayed in this -- model. Just popping down a few pieces here and there doesn't do it. Try to sculpt slopes, dig out trenches, make cliffs; just anything but that sorry collection of bricks.
  
• THOSE ARE NOT JEDI. By the Force, why is one wearing a fireman's hat! Where are their robes or armor... anything?
  
• The postioning of the units is piss-poor. A ARC just magically appears on the edge of the baseplate -- nice. Not a single droid turns to face him -- nice.
  
• Don't customize unless you know how. Get rid of that droid that looks like I bled on it. Furthermore, uniformity is key with units. Make the Seperatist lines organized, and try to get some similiarity between those clones. For goodness sake, you've got a unmarked ARC, a red ARC, and another who also looks like I smeared my bodily fluids on it. Keep them all red, all white, or don't put any down at all....

I can be your most bitter critiquer, or I can laud you from here to Ansion. You're far from the latter . Advise you shape up, because this is unacceptable as of current .

Come on dude, lighten up. For all we know he could be a five year old!

I am 13 years of age but thats not the point I haven't done that much because of homework and I only got so much to work with.

Well if you feel it's not complete, then DON'T POST IT. By posting it here, you're initially telling us to comment/critique on it. And by your attitude, I find it hard to believe you are 13.

[quote= And by your attitude, I find it hard to believe you are 13.[/quote]

I am 13. Work in progress means work in progress so this moc isn't finished.

Uh ooh, CC is going to eat you up!

You shouldn't open up threads on things like this that don't really have any relevance to anything. I've you're having a problem with another member take it up over PM or with a MOD not in a new thread.

Good point Legorevo, and I apologize for any inconvienences/whatever you call em, commander crusher. Now onto the MOC -

1. It's not public. End of story, good-bye, the end. (Yes, I like that quote, I don't remember where it was from though)