Squad 42.II - Remastered IV and V: Previews! UPDATED TODAY

Thunder-blade wrote:Sorry for the slight detour..

But after seeing last week's episode, I realized how large the battles in the CW were (haven't seen Ep. 2 in awhile). And I remember in your last film (Alone in the Dark), the fight was pretty low scaled. I know this is in part, due to the situation, but do you have plans for making a larger scale battle in the next film?

Yes, the scale is above that of most Clone Wars episodes. Don't fret! The scale of the new footage for the old films has been massively scaled up too, trust me!

Y'know, I think I can give you some pointers on the script right here without any spoilers. Let's see...

I like the story overall, but for a brickfilm it kinda drags. Unless you're planning on making it into a series of three or four installments, I don't think you could fit the plot comfortably into one short film without a) it being very rushed, or b) cutting a lot of the smaller character moments. If you do plan on trimming it, I would personally try and keep the worm stuff - great idea - but if I'm honest, you could cut:

- The limpets. I know, I know, but the story would pick up a lot of pace if they just got the MacGuffin and headed underground right away.

- Olsen. He adds very little IMO, is kinda annoying, and his purpose is pretty much entirely indicated by his mode of dress, if you know what I mean. Get the charges where they need to be some other way.

- Red Being a Dick. Normally I wouldn't sacrifice character pieces for a little plot momentum, but like Olsen, these bits just kinda get in the way and distract us from the situation at hand. Everybody's okay with commandoes having slightly less personality than the average character, and they could probably handle it better than Green and Red arguing over a comeback in the middle of a tense situation.

- Expo-bloody-sition. Really, we don't need to know exactly what gun Freeman is using; we don't need to know the full background of the mission; we don't even need to know that the Bascillion Sand Worm is called a Bascillion Sand Worm. Sometimes stuff happens and we don't know every little detail of why it happened - actually, that's how most things happen. You're allowed to leave use in the dark a little bit now and then if it speeds the story up.

In addition, I'd delete all the times someone says "oh God". None of our religions in the SWU, remember. You could either go with a stock SW swear (kriff, stang, etc.), make up a Bascillion swear, or go with a reference (frak, zark... 'belgium' is questionable ).

I'll read through it again later and see if anything else jumps out. I recommend get a couple other proof-readers specifically to look for dodgy dialogue and plot holes - those seem to be the two areas where people slip up the most.

You know... There were a fair few plot details there...

Obviously I don't know the whole thing, so keep whatever's vital. I'm just saying there's a lot of fat on this one compared to the skinnier offerings of your previous ventures. It's not necassarily a terrible thing, as long as you handle it really well.

The Jinja Ninja wrote:Obviously I don't know the whole thing, so keep whatever's vital. I'm just saying there's a lot of fat on this one compared to the skinnier offerings of your previous ventures. It's not necassarily a terrible thing, as long as you handle it really well.

Well, thanks for the input. What did you think of the possibility of the second idea?

If you want a second person's thoughts, you know where to look Gareth .

Zepher wrote:If you want a second person's thoughts, you know where to look Gareth .

Yes indeed, I might do that.

I'd happily give my opinion as well (even though it probably wouldn't be half as good a Jinja's!).

fithboy wrote:I'd happily give my opinion as well (even though it probably wouldn't be half as good a Jinja's!).

I think i'll reserve it for people I actually know.

Garet6 wrote:

fithboy wrote:I'd happily give my opinion as well (even though it probably wouldn't be half as good a Jinja's!).

I think i'll reserve it for people I actually know.

Sorry. Do you know Zepher?

fithboy wrote:

Garet6 wrote:

fithboy wrote:I'd happily give my opinion as well (even though it probably wouldn't be half as good a Jinja's!).

I think i'll reserve it for people I actually know.

Sorry. Do you know Zepher?

Don't you think that's a bit of a thick question?

Front page updated with the official trailer for No Alternative! It's a cracker. :grin:

I love it!

The CGI scenes add so much to it.

It looks awesome, and TB...agreed.

Wow! The CGI is a vast improvement, exellence use of resources! Most impressive indeed.

Just saw the trailer.... It is a long trailer but good trailer. The CGI is better then the first gunship you made. May I ask what song is that and what did you use to make the CGI lego? Its not LDD so what is it?

Updated with a picture of the new (SPOILERS) Electro Magnetic Blast. Please, check it out! :grin:

Garet6 wrote:Updated with a picture of the new (SPOILERS) Electro Magnetic Blast. Please, check it out! :grin:

The electric wave looks as if it is the size of a tsunami. Astonishing!

Rogue wrote:

Garet6 wrote:Updated with a picture of the new (SPOILERS) Electro Magnetic Blast. Please, check it out! :grin:

The electric wave looks as if it is the size of a tsunami. Astonishing!

That's pretty much the effect I was going for, i'm glad that'd evident.